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#16 Hella

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Posted 05 October 2005 - 01:07

skrati prvi stih, ima šest slogova.
dovoljno je "puši purgeru".

#17 Venom

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Posted 05 October 2005 - 01:09

pu-shi ga pur-ge-ru
1 2 3 4 5 6


you suck.

edit: bah

Edited by Venom, 05 October 2005 - 01:10.


#18 Goranz

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Posted 05 October 2005 - 01:33

pusi purgeru
sa ustima skrbavim
jer ti si govno


Hej hej Venome
sisaj **rac retarde
cuti i pusi

#19 barracuda

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Posted 05 October 2005 - 02:04

Protivnik je uvek u pasivnoj pozi, najcesce krsten kao picka. Samo za gospodu sa istancanim ukusom:

Ljabu il' riba,
Samo neka giba. Mi
Grobari Tikva.

Edited by Undead, 05 October 2005 - 02:05.


#20 vasudeva418

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Posted 13 October 2005 - 10:59

"Oko martinke
svijen - grobar nariče
k'o neka pička."


U ovoj pesmi nemamo "kigo", ali je, po uzoru na japanske majstore, upotrebljena aliteracija primenjena na onomatopeju, tj, dvojac "nariče" i "pičke" potencira sugestivno ponavljanje foneme "ič" koja neodoljivo asocira na grobara koji zapomaže dok je svijen oko martinke.